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0Take time to proofread your story. You’ll be fine.anonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:51:53very niceeeee.plz continueanonymous readerReport 2011-03-05 12:38:57PLEASE follow the advice of senorlongo. XXX I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. First, proofread your work several times. The story plot is interesting, but all the misspellings and wrong use of words was so distracting that I didn’t bother to finish the story. However, I loved the theme and the characters. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience.
