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I suggest paragraphs, and better dialogue structuring could help the readed wuite a bit. Also if she was drugged shouldn’t she be feeling a little drowsy and disorientated, not “oh wow I’m naked and there a man next to me, hey mister!!!”anonymous readerReport 2012-02-11 22:59:41pYxkEG As I have expected, the writer blurted out..!anonymous readerReport 2011-02-21 17:34:48Sloppy. Eporner The structure was diffucult to read. work on your structuring and this could be a very good story.BigDoug35Report 2011-02-07 12:11:11Your structure is sloppy. You need some paragraphs and more story flow.anonymous readerReport 2011-02-04 20:35:16Not much dialoge. . . . . . …«1» Also, shouldn’t there be a kind of lead-up to the whole kidnap thing because it is kind of a plonk in the middle of a street and get raped. work on your structuring and this could be a very good story.BigDoug35Report 2011-02-07 12:11:11Your structure is sloppy. work on your structuring and this could be a very good story.BigDoug35Report 2011-02-07 12:11:11Your structure is sloppy. work on your structuring and this could be a very good story.BigDoug35Report 2011-02-07 12:11:11Your structure is sloppy.