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Howvever, on a plus note, you do have an easy to read writing manner, that IF you formed into paras and spell checked and used the correct tense would probably manke a very readable story. If you write another one then let us know beforehand & we can book our coffins with the undertaker and read the story from inside, then with loss of breath they can stick the lid on!READERReport 2007-06-29 11:31:20hmm.. Eporner The lack of paragraphs, the switch from one tense to another,often withing two lines of text, all go to make it hard for the reader to appreciate the effort you have no doubt put in. I stopped reading after the 22nd line or so. This isn’t unusual and believe me, a good editor would very definitely, turn your story into more than you would think possible.