Curvy Sarah Greenmore Pleasures Herself For The Yankees

2 comments«1»Ovid58Report 2012-11-12 06:07:23I didn’t vote, since I don’t want to spoil your ranking – anyway, please be more careful – just as the anonymous reader has already said, you switch between third person and first person in a way that really makes things hard to follow… But it would be easier to read with a blank line after each paragraph. Overall, not bad for a first submission. Overall, not bad for a first submission. On the other hand, you’ve mentioned that this is a true story… He shares a bed with her when he’s not relegated to the couch- but is a virgin? 2 comments«1»Ovid58Report 2012-11-12 06:07:23I didn’t vote, since I don’t want to spoil your ranking – anyway, please be more careful – just as the anonymous reader has already said, you switch between third person and first person in a way that really makes things hard to follow… Who is she? The basic premise is a bit off for a supposed “true story” as well.