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chip84freshmanReport 2009-02-10 02:23:18A bit short but still quite good will we be seeing anymore of the forced slavery of Rachael. Try composing your material better by using pargraphs it does make the story look better on paper and so more appealing to read!!!«12» Try to think about paragraphs in terms of thematic unity: a paragraph is a sentence or a group of sentences that supports one central, unified idea. XXX many thanks
chip84freshmanReport 2009-02-10 02:23:18A bit short but still quite good will we be seeing anymore of the forced slavery of Rachael. Try composing your material better by using pargraphs it does make the story look better on paper and so more appealing to read!!!«12» i am currently working on a couple of other things which are near completion, but i promise there will be a second part. Paragraphs add one idea at a time to your broader argument.Anonymous readerReport 2009-05-05 06:07:55Very good – however watch your punctuation and grammer and please break the text down to paragraphs as it
