Part-time Job At Family Restaurant Isn’t Enough For My Kansai-dialect J-style Girlfriend With A Boyfriend (rima 1●) From The Go-home Club

almost as hard to read as some of the stories posted here…Sorry, but my suggestions are still valid. Eporner …lolanonymous readerReport 2012-04-20 12:41:29Overall, it has some potential. Too much detail on the ship, and where you went on the ship. Fuck thisanonymous readerReport 2012-04-20 12:43:23Geez! You might try using more words like “I’m” instead of “I am”, and “We’re” instead of “we are”. Agree with the thing to drop the background characters unless you plan to bring them into a teenage orgy in someone’s cabin.«12» Agree with the thing to drop the background characters unless you plan to bring them into a teenage orgy in someone’s cabin.«12» Agree with the thing to drop the background characters unless you plan to bring them into a teenage orgy in someone’s cabin.«12» Agree with the thing to drop the background characters unless you plan to bring them into a teenage orgy in someone’s cabin.«12»