Veronica Avluv Gives A First-person Oral Performance

Good luck.anonymous readerReport 2011-02-19 12:31:57Great start, good pacing and interesting characters. 7 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-19 14:41:38I’ll agree with the fact that your grammar effected your story. Eporner How does it sound to you? Good Luck. Good luck.anonymous readerReport 2011-02-19 12:31:57Great start, good pacing and interesting characters. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. Take time to proofread your story. I usually spend 25% writing and 75% editting. How does it sound to you? However, I loved the theme and the characters. You don’t have to be an English Expert, but you should show some respect for your readers. How does it sound to you? I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and